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Today, I wrestle with my thoughts
And am scattered.
I have wrapped my joy in few words
And family:
caustic:
covered it in rude noise.

Oh, to have you to sleep with
(and whisper to)
Through this brief and intense
chill.
Instead, I cover
my whole body
in blankets,
Only to find that I can never recreate

your real warmth.
i hate loud people.
of course, it depends on the sort of loud.

my family is obnoxiously noisy in the most itchy way.

fuck.
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salmonella-poisoned Nov 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This is so accurate.
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:iconwritingfiercely:
thank you
accurate to where you get the feeling or accurate to where you know the feeling yourself?
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salmonella-poisoned Nov 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I just know exactly what you're talking about (:
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:iconrelayerduos:
Your poems are getting more and more artistic. It's good progress.
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:iconwritingfiercely:
i'm glad! i think they're getting better, too
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:iconrelayerduos:
Just keep getting more and more picky
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:iconfirmasrock:
I love the way you wrote this. It so works.
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:iconwritingfiercely:
thanks so much! what works about it?
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:iconfirmasrock:
The way you presented your thoughts and expressions gives it a clarity. That clarity works.
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